Fangala the Flying Feline

Another nice poem. You have a talent for setting up mood and atmosphere in a small amount of words. You also have lots of good subtle rhyme in here, like ...

Beautiful! In all my time on this site, I've never seen a poem with a picture, so congrats on originality! On to the crit: And electromagnetism Hisses vengefully As pines ...

Wow! Just when I thought vampires had become unbearably cliche, you pulled through and showed me something new. It's hilarious how the turning ceremony has a red carpet and everything, ...

Yes, a cat story! Love those. Good first sentence--very gripping. It pulled me in right away. The mouse chewed on, unaware of his presence Awkward sentence. I understand what you're ...

OH MY GOD! This is gorgeous! Without a doubt the BEST thing I have read for a LONG time. Your dialogue is flawlessly realistic and funny. Especially this: Druth made ...

Short indeed, but hey, intriguing nonetheless. Especially when you say "two different races". Since this is in the fantasy section, I'm thinking more like different species, but I guess I'll ...

Hopefully I didn't go metaphor-crazy with this chapter. :) I tried to forget everything—the terror, the unholy splay of limbs, the way I surrendered like a dying sun to the ...

Oops. Did I go metaphor-crazy again? Thanks for pointing that out, guys. I had no idea. :) And yes, I know Chessie's naivete is a little over-the-top, but hey, it's ...

Hi, everyone! This chapter is rated for gritty, edgy content (which you were probably expecting because of Chessie's naivete). Anyway, thanks for the reviews. Chapter Three: When the wave washed ...

Fabulous! marched over to the buffet style table, like I was walking a runway rather than in a shelter, hearing the satisfying click of my shoes, and the whispers of ...

Hi, there! Another nice chapter, but I thought it was stiff. It seems like you lost the flow of previous chapters when you got to the shelter, but don't worry. ...

Critique time! This is beautiful. You have fresh, vivid, intriguing imagery, but I wonder what this is about? Does this describe the lives of all children? A special group of ...

Great! I love the happy-go-lucky Huck Finn style narrative. The stanzas are pleasantly irrelevant, flow well, and are a pleasure to read. Don't worry about the capitalization. Have you read ...

Wow. What a talented storyteller you are! This was one of the most interesting things I've ever read on this site. For the first half, I couldn't tell if Ayal ...

Lovely poem. You have some strong and unexpected lines, such as: No one told me I had wings Powerful opening. It makes the reader wonder how the narrator could have ...